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If my scars could be washed away with soap and hot water, I would be flawless.
I would stand under the scalding water of my shower, watching the blood and tears that are my scars flow freely from my body and down the drain.
Away from me.
I would scrub my body until it was crimson from the heat and friction.
I would become a mass of salty bubbles.
I would breather in the steam, and exhale the pain.
I would soak my drenched body until my pores screamed with nakedness.
I would become absorbed in my ecstasy.
My hair would be plastered to my face and neck, afraid to move lest the dream be awoken.
I would be frozen in time, content to forever be safe and clean.
Yet, as the water evaporates, so does the dream.
The chill causes my skin to crawl.
Causes my hair to sway in the breeze.
I would have to remove myself from my blanched prison.
I would stand, letting the last of my flaws dissipate into the air.
I would drape my glowing body with midnight cotton.
I would brave the world, until next the scars were too much.
Until next I would again wash them away with hot water and soap, peeling away the layers of my life, until I become pure again.
©2007-2009 *noodlekneader
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Okay, so. I wrote this a few days ago in my math class. The prompt, "If my scars could be washed away with soap and hot water..." was given to me by my writing 'mentor' Mush. Tell me what you think!!
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I LOVE IT!!! its exactly the thing i would do - shame it doesnt really work or i would be perfect too

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I know, right?! Goddess...if that really worked...*shakes her head* If only...anywho, thanks!!

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I know I'm not perfect. I don't pretend to be. I don't strive to be.

But I know I'm getting better...and that's what's important to me...

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i wish that would work. so sad that it won't...

"scars are memories that never fade and souvineers we never lose." -my psychiatrist told me that the last time i saw her 4 years ago. sometimes scars can be a good thing, they remind us of where we were and how far we have come. (if you want to use this quote, ask me. i have used it in my poetry before, and wouldn't want someone to steal it.)

awesome description btw. i love how it paints a picture in my mind. that is the most amazing thing you can do with words.

make people feel what you feel and see what you see.

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as a matter of fact...i DO bite...
I would like to use that, as a matter of fact. It's very good. I have actually been asked many times if I would change parts of my past if I could, and after much thought I've found I wouldn't. As you mentioned, my scars are a large part of me. They represent my past, and how far I've moved past it. And this is actually one of my favorites of the poems I've written. So I'm glad you like it!

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--Vez

I know I'm not perfect. I don't pretend to be. I don't strive to be.

But I know I'm getting better...and that's what's important to me...

:heart: I love my boyfriend Wesley! :heart:
my favourite of your poems, and I know what you mean. It is our past experiences, good or bad, that make us who we are in the present and help to shape the future. Everyone has their scars whether they are mental or physical, and those scars are what give us the substance of human beings.

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Catapultam habeo. Nisi pecuniam omnem mihi dabis, ad caput tuum saxum immane mittam
(I have a catapult. Unless you give all of your money to me, I will fling an enormous rock at your head)
Thanks! And thanks for the fave!! You are so awesome!

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--Vez

I know I'm not perfect. I don't pretend to be. I don't strive to be.

But I know I'm getting better...and that's what's important to me...

:heart: I love my boyfriend Wesley! :heart:
I also admire this poem very much. You are so good with metaphores! And your description is fabuloud too, it helps visualize the shower, the hair, the burns, and the "scars" washing away. Great poem of renewal. One of my favorites.

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Yours in perpetual admiration,

Valkyrius
Thanks!! You are too kind...

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--Vez

I know I'm not perfect. I don't pretend to be. I don't strive to be.

But I know I'm getting better...and that's what's important to me...

:heart: I love my boyfriend Wesley! :heart:
beautifully written.

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Yeah, it's me....what would you expect? :P
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